英検３級のライティング対策として、英文を４つ作ってみました。 回答としておかしなところや改善点があればご教示願います。…

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英検３級のライティング対策として、英文を４つ作ってみました。
回答としておかしなところや改善点があればご教示願います。
受験者は小学６年生になります。Which do you like better,playing baseball or playing soccer ?
① I like playing baseball better.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can hit very well.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to play baseball.

Do you want to live abroad in the future ?
① I want to live in Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.

Where do you want to go during your summer vacation ?
① I want to go to Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.

What is your favorite place ?
① My favorite place is Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.

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Do you want to live abroad in the future?
① I want to live in Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.
→回答がズレてます。質問は、「将来海外に住みたいですか？」なので、最初はYes/Noで答えるべきで、回答者がどこに住みたいかは聞いていません。
また④ですが、ハワイにいくのは楽しいって、住んでるのに行くってどういうことですか？なぜ楽しいと思うのかをもっと明確にすべきです。（例えば食べ物が美味しいとかハワイの文化が好きだとか）抽象的な表現は避けて下さい。

Where do you want to go during your summer vacation?
① I want to go to Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.
→これも2番目と同様、なにが楽しいのかを書く必要があります。

What is your favorite place ?
① My favorite place is Hawaii.
② I have two reasons.
③ First, I can go to the sea.
④ Second, it is a lot of fun for me to go to Hawaii.
→これも2番目と同様、なにが楽しいのかを書く必要があります。