英検3級ライティングの添削をお願いします。

Question

英検3級ライティングの添削をお願いします。Q. Which do you like better, reading the news in the newspaper or reading the news
on the Internet?

I like reading the news is the Internet better.
I have two reasons.
First, newsparer is not look on the smartphone. also, need money.
Second, Internet can to know many people openion.
(28語)

どこをどうしたらいいかとか、これで何点貰えるかとかを教えていただけるとありがたいです。

Answer 1

英検3級ライティングの添削をお願いします。
Q. Which do you like better, reading the news in the newspaper or reading the news on the Internet?

14/28語

I like reading the news is the Internet better.
I have two reasons.
First, newsparer is not look on the smartphone. also, need money.
Second, Internet can to know many people openion.

newsparer → newspaper
openion → opinions

Try this!

I like reading the news on the Internet better. I have two reasons. First, I cannot look at the newspaper on my smartphone. I also need money to read a newspaper. Second, on the Internet I can get to know the opinions of many people.