英検準1の面接です。こんなものでいいんでしょうかナレーションは。出来るだけ簡単が良くてこれにしましたが、受かりませんか？…

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英検準1の面接です。こんなものでいいんでしょうかナレーションは。出来るだけ簡単が良くてこれにしましたが、受かりませんか？
文法の直しも教えて欲しいです。One day, a woman was at a cafe with her mother and son.
The woman was holding a cup of coffee.
Her son was eating a piece of cake.
The old woman pointed at the poster said Early learning brings career success.
The woman decided to consult her husband.

A few weeks later, the woman said to her husband "these will all be good for our son."Her husband was convinced of her idea.

One month later, the woman said to her son "We're late for your swimming lesson.
Her son was surprised at her word. And he was getting out from ABC English school.

On the way to the pool, the woman and her son was riding their bicycle.They were looking at children who were at the park.
Her son thought he wanted to play at the park. However, he had swimming lessons, so he can'tplay at the park.

もし女性だったらに対しての回答は

If I were the woman, I'd be thinking I shouldn't have gone English school.
It is because my son's schdule is too tight. He don't have time to play.I want him to enjoy his life.

Answer 1

良い質問ですね。

ナレーションの修正すべき点がありますので、修正します。

The old woman pointed at the advertisements and said, 'Early learning brings career success.'

Her son was surprised about what was written there.

となります。より自然な英語になります。

３コマ目の画像では、しっかりとhadを使って下さい。これは要となります。

もう一回言います。本当にこれが要となるので、しっかりとhadを使ってください。３コマ目で、英語と水泳のクラスに（すでに）入っていた、という意味合いです。ここでhadが使えないと、加点されません！減点の対象となります！！！！

"One month later, the woman said to her son, 'We're late for your swimming lesson,' as he was getting out of ABC English School. Her son was surprised by what his mother said.

They were running on a tight schedule, as her son had joined both swimming and English classes."

もうお解りになったと思います。まだ何か質問があったらお気軽に質問してくださいね！